英作文を書くポイント

Lang-8やNyan-8で日本人が書いた英語のエントリーをたくさん読んだ。日本人が苦労しているところがいくつかある。例えば、最後の文章は、不必要で場違いな感じがすることが多いと思う。 私はパターンを認識するのは得意だと思う。全国テストや大学・大学院の入学試験の作文試験では、いつも高得点を取っていたので、英作文を書くポイントをリストアップしようと思っていた。これらのポイントは作文を書くためのもので、Nyan-8のエントリーなどでは若干異なるかもしれない。 最初の段落は、読者の注意を引くための「フック」から始まる。下記に「How to write hooks」という記事のリンクを記載する。フックのあと、論文ステートメント、要するに、言いたいことを書く。 次の段落は任意だが、問題の説明や必要な背景情報を提供するために使う。 次の2つか3つの段落は、言いたいことをサポートする証拠（エビデンス）を書くので、通常、段落ごとに主要なポイントは1つだけだ。よく、一番強い点を最後に書くようにと言うも人いるが、順番は個人好みでいいと思う。 最後の段落では、再び論文ステートメントを書き、それが社会や世間一般にどのように関係しているかを記述で締めくくる。これらの最後の文章は裏付ける証拠が必要ではない。どちらかというと、書き手や読み手、あるいは社会がもっと考えるべきことだ。 おそらくこの形式にさえ従えば、英作文のテストで高得点を取ることができるだろう。私は最近英作文を書いていなかったので、久しぶりに一例として書いてみた。 母国語欄に追加した。このポイントに従っての、でっち上げエッセイである。 how to write hooks https://www.grammarly.com/blog/how-to-write-a-hook/#:~:text=The%20hook%20could%20be%20a,writer's%20position%20from%20the%20outset.

[b]General intro and thesis[/b] Do you suffer from or know many people with stiff shoulders? If so, you are probably Japanese or are friends with Japanese people. Westerners do not often complain about this condition and may be confused as to why this is such a common ailment in Japan. Surprisingly, new research may shed light on this phenomenon. Likely, the Western habit of eating sushi packed with avocado may play a role. Recent studies have found that eating raw fish is very likely to cause stiff shoulders but consuming avocado may protect shoulders from stiffness. This begs the question if more people should adopt this Western habit. [b]Background[/b] When Westerners come to Japan many expect questions related to things such as their ability to eat sushi and hear comments about their chopstick proficiency. One comment they may not have anticipated is about the Japanese stiff shoulder phenomenon. According to a recent survey around 11% of Japanese suffer from stiff shoulders. In addition, long-time foreign residents of Japan have also been developing stiff shoulders at an alarming rate.    [b]Evidence, support A[/b] [cr]Stifferin[/cr] is a protein that has been long known to exist at high levels in fish. However, it was not thought to have a biological effect on the human body.  The isolated protein has been shown to cause stiff shoulders and is also heat sensitive and thus is not present in cooked fish. However, according to recent research, lovers of raw fish are likely unknowingly consuming high and potentially dangerous levels of this protein. It is then rapidly absorbed in the digestive tract and travels to its target muscle group, the shoulders. Local sushi enthusiast Mr. Ohgui upon hearing this news said, "I eat sushi very much. And also have stiff shoulders every day. Very shocked to hear." [b]Evidence, support B[/b] One puzzling aspect of the stiff shoulders debate is that while sushi has rapidly become more popular in the West and sushi restaurants are flourishing, there does not seem to be a corresponding rise in stiff shoulders. Researchers may have an answer. Avocado, which is commonly a key ingredient in Western sushi rolls, has high levels of an enzyme researchers have dubbed [cb]stifferase[/cb]. This enzyme shows high activity in the lab for the breakdown of stiff shoulders causing [cr]stifferin[/cr]. Additionally in the same study, it was observed that diners of avocado-containing California rolls show no detectable levels of [cr]stifferin[/cr] in the blood. Avocado may be essentially a panacea to this difficult-to-treat condition. [b]Thesis, relation to society or the world[/b] It is now clear that consumption of raw fish may lead to stiff shoulders and the Western practice of eating avocado sushi rolls can counteract this. While many people worldwide believe that Western diets are unhealthy, leading to poor health and obesity, it may be prudent to not throw the baby out with the bathwater. Some parts of Western diets such as eating avocado-containing sushi rolls may be one of those babies worth saving. If people in Japan would expand their range of sushi choices to include delicious California rolls it could have a wide-ranging societal impact. Not only would incidents of stiff shoulders be reduced or eliminated but it could even greatly reduce associated medical costs and even be able to help reduce Japan's overall debt levels. It is a proposition that Japanese people should consider sinking their teeth into.